Saturday, 24 September 2011

Lunch with Bev and Veronica - Mrs. Jenny Matlock's Saturday Centus - Week 73

Jenny Matlock

Welcome to Saturday Centus, Week 73, Mrs. Jenny Matlock's writing challenge, where participants are asked to write a PG-rated text to a given written prompt. This week Jenny has asked us to write a Dialogue story and the prompt is 'Are you seriously ordering another martini?'.

Here are Jenny's instructions:

This week we are doing a DIALOGUE story.

All dialogue. Period.

WORD COUNT - 150 WORDS PLUS THE SIX WORDS OF THE PROMPT. Total word count not to exceed 156 words.
STYLE OF WRITING - DIALOGUE ONLY
NO PICTURES - PAINT THE STORY WITH YOUR WORDS
THE PROMPT THIS WEEK IS: "Are you seriously ordering another martini?"


Here is my text:

'Hi Bev dear, thanks for coming!'

'Thanks for the invitation, Ms.Wissenmacher. What was it that you wanted to talk to me about?'

'Call me Veronica, Sweetie. Your novel. Let's look at the menu. The ham and crab-salad's simply divine.'

'I'll take the omlette.'

'What about a cocktail? I've already started one.'

'Fine. Now, what about the novel?'

'Just some minor changes. The title for one.'

Waiter, please, another drink. What's wrong with the title? '

'Death on Sunday kinda gives away the whole plot.'

'She dies on a Sunday! She's terminally ill! Thanks, another martini.'

'Pity that she dies. Death puts a damper on things. We were hoping for a sequel.'

'Look, Ms. Wissenmacher...'

'Veronica.'

'Look, she simply must die. That's her story! To change that would... Waiter, another martini!'

'Now, Beverly. You ought to...
Are you seriously ordering another martini?'.

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Word count: 150 plus the six words of the prompt.
[Text Copyright 2011 Christina Wigren]
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Best wishes,
Anna




P.S. This text is purely fiction. I haven't written any novel, and I never drink alcoholic beverages - ever. Here, I am really using my imagination, taking inspiration from scenes from old movies.
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14 Comments:

anitamombanita said...

like it...only one suggestion...maybe it could have been Lunch with G & V...gin and vodka... ;)

Judie said...

GREAT job on this, Anna! Those editors! What do THEY know!!!!

Viki said...

If I had an editor like that I would want a few martini's even though I don't like them, ha, ha. Great job.

Nonna Beach said...

Excellent job Anna !

You kept all the rules and painted a very vivid picture with your words, just as Jenny wanted us to...Bravo !!!

Ann said...

I like your text. I also like the title "Death on Sunday"

Rawknrobyn.blogspot.com said...

This is funny and frustrating, knowing how realistic this scenario is. Great post, Anna.
I hope you're well, sweet lady.
xoRobyn

Deborah said...

Wonderfully done ... and of course that's the story! :o)

Wanderer said...

Poor Beverly! Good job.

Reka Sang said...

well, Veronica err Beverly err Anna... maybe next time throw some of the drink on the agent clothes subtly, loved this...which is why I am going the self publishing way...At least I won't end up an alcoholic.

cj Schlottman said...

Anna,

Your dialogue clips along at a pace that adds to the feeling of distress in your author. Well done!

Namaste........cj

Kat said...

Really good Anna! You wrote this dialogue really well, I could feel the author's impatience and nervousness. And that editor - what a piece of work! Great use of the prompt.

Dazee Dreamer said...

good job. and the poor girl having them not like her title. way to stick up for her rights!!

laurie @ bargain hunting said...

I doubt that I will ever have to deal with an editor, but if I am treated this way, I'm going to order at least one martini. Good job. laurie

Jenny said...

IF I ever write a novel...

and IF I get to meet with my editor...

and IF we are discussing how to change my work...

I will definitely NOT be going to a restaurant with a bar!

This was fabulous Anna!

I really liked this.

I never realized how good you were at dialogue.

Very neat!

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